I am Stephen. I live in Bristol, UK. I decided to shorten my profile...to this: Wildlife, haiku, travel, streetart, psychogeography and my family. Not necessarily in that order.
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7 thoughts on “Evening sun”
Brilliant use of “trajectory” in a haiku! Perfect and lovely form.
I use the 3 syllable version of evening. I guess it can be 2 or 3. Sometimes I avoid words which have syllable options (depending on pronounciation) , because it gets awkward.
My fave bit of this one is the ‘ject’ sounds. I wrote it in a meeting this afternoon as the sun streamed into the room and the window was framed on the opposite wall with light. I love that clear early Spring light.
Oh, forgive me — my brain isn’t quite as refine as yours! Isn’t that fun to sit at a meeting and to be diligently writing?! Lol. It’s a gorgeous haiku.
Nothing to forgive, and your poetry is something I am inspired by and aspire to. Most of my haiku happen in the moment and I have to jot them down there and then.
Thank you. I agree about an image, but in a way, I think everyone knows that warming light that shines on walls or the carpet. Cats always find the ones on the floor and sit in the pool of light. I like to join them.
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Brilliant use of “trajectory” in a haiku! Perfect and lovely form.
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Oops! Well, almost perfect — the first line 😉
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I use the 3 syllable version of evening. I guess it can be 2 or 3. Sometimes I avoid words which have syllable options (depending on pronounciation) , because it gets awkward.
My fave bit of this one is the ‘ject’ sounds. I wrote it in a meeting this afternoon as the sun streamed into the room and the window was framed on the opposite wall with light. I love that clear early Spring light.
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Oh, forgive me — my brain isn’t quite as refine as yours! Isn’t that fun to sit at a meeting and to be diligently writing?! Lol. It’s a gorgeous haiku.
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Nothing to forgive, and your poetry is something I am inspired by and aspire to. Most of my haiku happen in the moment and I have to jot them down there and then.
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An image would complete the gorgeousnnessness–just saying. Yay! to the haiku.
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Thank you. I agree about an image, but in a way, I think everyone knows that warming light that shines on walls or the carpet. Cats always find the ones on the floor and sit in the pool of light. I like to join them.
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