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Railway trip to York
many more people than seats
thank goodness I booked
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by Scooj
* a terrible haiku describing an uncomfortable scene.
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Railway trip to York
many more people than seats
thank goodness I booked
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by Scooj
* a terrible haiku describing an uncomfortable scene.
Ha, not so terrible, although I was disappointed to find they werenβt the edible ones.
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Cross Country presumably. I hate even the short trip to Bristol or Birmingham on their filthy ancient trains.
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Yep, the Newcastle train, filthy, old and incredibly cramped. What has happened to our railways? It isnβt as if it was a cheap trip either.
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You should stop trying to write a haiku in the Japanese format of 575 because it’s not meant for English. Just write a poem of 17 syllables. π
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You are right, but I rather like the structural challenge, it is part of the game. Very occasionally I break from the haiku and write a free form poem, but I am not a poet. The main thing for me is the mental discipline. Telling stories succinctly. I am not a haiku purist I guess, it is a vehicle for me to use. Just sometimes I churn out a good one.
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But what I am saying is the 575 rule isn’t meant to be syllables ya know
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